She turned twenty-three. Postman delivered gift from her best friend living faraway. Unwrapping it, Sarah recieved her favourite - a book, classic this time. She hurried to her room and fastened the door. After reading few initial chapters, she desperately wished her life to be different. She looked at her fingers and a thumb and wished they were her wings; her black Burkah, her long tresses. She didn’t dream to walk or run today and get liberated from her prosthetic leg. Instead she wanted to hover high, breaking all the barriers around her leaving world underneath the vast galactic sky.
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P.P.S. Sarah is Urdu word that means pure.
Drabble is a piece of fiction strictly in hundred words.
Great first attempt!! I felt her longing to fly and break free!
ReplyDeleteThankyou So much Aditi. I am feeling confident now! Glad you liked the post! :)
Deletewell justified format and an awesome weave !!
ReplyDeleteThankyou so much for appreciating it and liking it. :)
DeleteGreat..and u know what..this can be a beginning or an end of a story in making..
ReplyDeleteThankyou Hemant. Yes, I wanted to expand the idea, write more but then leaving the rest on readers to imagine further and portraying the feelings in strictly hundred words seemed more challenging!
DeleteNice read. It shows that how a young mind has all the questions and wants to break free of the norms set by mindless society. Write more such stuff.
ReplyDeleteThankyou Shine. :)
Deleteemotion packed and thought provoking micro-fiction!!
ReplyDeletegreat going shesha...keep it UP !
and the end(or the another beginning) looks to be spiritually correct; where horizontal growth is limited and not longed for after some chase (She didn’t dream to walk or run today ) but vertical growth is limit-less and the only need once one tastes it (Instead she wanted to hover high).
you can see some more drabbles at :
http://forums.drabblecast.org/viewforum.php?f=10
http://www.drabblecast.org/
this looks to be bigger forum for micro-fiction; you can register and submit your fiction and micro-fiction here.
Thankyou Pratibh for motivating words. :)
ReplyDeleteSure will take part in bigger micro fiction forums! Glad you liked the post.
Enjoy reading your mood based posts every now and then. Sometimes they even reflect my own line of thought and swing of the mood. This one sure is a sign of the many many barriers we have around us and within us and the liberation we constantly seek and sometimes find.
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